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(Contains: sexual themes)
Tie me up, gag my mouth,
Whip me till Im sore,
Ill be your slave, Ill be your pet,
Ill be your fucking whore,
Slash my legs with razorblades,
Fuck me rough and hard,
Do what you must, have your way,
And leave me bruised and scarred,
Put me on my leash and tease my hormones,
Punish me if I moan,
Choke me out on my collar,
For everytime I groan,
Finally you free me, and I have my way,
Tormenting you the best I can,
The night ends, and we go to bed,
With whip marks all along your back
Im into BDSM on a light level, so I figured Id bash out a poem about it.
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sasukesmainlover Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2015
Nice poem hope your being safe in your blood play and other type of play
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rosepiramid Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
a light level?? ...okay
so you're a switch?
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Ellohra Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015  Student General Artist
Light?? Thats not light hun. You dont draw blood. Biggest rule of bdsm; you dont hurt each other. If its painful, then its crossing the line into abuse.
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GnaeusEsclavus Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Great work man!
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sacredZinja Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have the feeling that everytime someone talks about bdsm, some poeple will pop up and claim that they know about "real" bdsm and whatever was said before has nothing to do with it. :D

I liked the turn at the end of your poem. It somehow points out that this is all about a (probabaly very harmonious) relationship, not just about pain and blood.
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WelcomeToChaos237 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Damn bro... Nice
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SwitchJenna2747 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
I rather enjoyed your poem but I am a real person in bdsm and I think you have much to learn hormone should never be used in a bdsm reference unless referred to a trans and the marks you speak of are well worded. So if I had to grade your work it is a C+ in my book. Keep writing and I will keep reading I look forward to see what you come up with next.
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AnimusArgentis Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
This sucks dick with too much teeth. Light level BDSM participant indeed. Nobody can switch from subspace to domspace that quickly, at all. And you lose pace in the 'hormones' line and then again in 'have my way.'

Please, stop writing poetry and get the fucking fuck out of BDSM.

I'm not sure any of these commenters are into BDSM either - as a true dom and sadist and a published novelist, I have no fear in telling you that this is seriously a literary abortion.

Any other real dom would tell you the same. Not coddle you like the rest of these fools.
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gah, my apoligies. That dashing little Submit Comment button is rather cramped on DA mobile. But as I was getting at, I never truly bothered over all this time now to really indulge or explore into BDSM too deeply. I personally find what I would say is some strange pull from what I've found of it. As opposed to landing balls deep in it all and sticking with it.

I thank you for reading, it will likely cruise over your head, perhaps logic is a weapon. Insults are assured. Or so I've learned.

If you gave whole hearted critisism, in a polite fashion, perhaps we could've carried a better conversation, you could've shed insight at least for future reference.

But you used harsh lambasting through an insultive nature. That is your loss, from my own observations of our world, if that's a way to sum it up.

Carry on with your ways sir. I do not doubt your writing is bad. Perhaps just over self-glorified.
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AnimusArgentis Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Really?

Buddy, your attempts at being coy are falling woefully short.

As a member of MENSA, I assure you, very little goes over my head, particularly in the logic field of things. Social skills? Please. This is not a social circle, this is you having put out mediocre work expecting praise and as a published author, I am offended.

At any rate, it was my submissive that pointed out the troll fodder you've posted here. I merely took the bait.

*shrug* Take from it what you will.
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You must be a revered/welcome figure in social circles, or maybe in applicable fields? I see at least this generations effects have helped hone those people skills us gentlemen demand of ourselves. I feel it would be unfair, maybe even a tad bit biased, to assume you only carry this firm and level headed, maybe even hardened mentailty that oozes through the structure of your exclamation simply from your
time now as a true dom.


I, then and now, do not carry much place or "position" if you will (A little humor, if being dominate upon such a turn :P has not altered the need for the entrsnce of a pun)
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Ravan-VanSlaughter Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm a huge supporter of male domination, I don't like it when females are in charge. But this was great :)
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hear ya, I indeed am a dom-sub, but that's almost strictly in positions in bed (Whose riding who, etc.) And when I wrote this poem, I was still early on in my growing interest of bondage. I sorta wrote this poem to express some thought on it all, and with me being submissive in the poem, I was able to highlight some of the "tools" and "methods" that struck me first upon finding my place in bondage. If that makes any sense lol. Generally, I prefer, and maybe even have to be dominate with females, particularly during sex. I like to be rough, hear them whine, etc. O.o Ahem. Thankyou for reading the poem, glad you enjoyed it :)  
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virginbitch Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I love men like that but all i can find are sweet guys i want a guy in charge.
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spellinglover Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
Wow! I'm really picky about poetry, but this had a really interesting subject! Well done!
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Sigyn669 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
Very very nice
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Lucindae Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013
I love it! Expresses so much of a side people are afraid to show.
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FoaminianPriestess Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Writer
*claps* Bravo! Very well done!
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :) And was it?
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FoaminianPriestess Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah! I truly enjoyed it!
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RevVanous Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012
raw However very nice
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :) Yeah, being blunt was a little too easy with this one.
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Gunny51 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
I like this poem and its thoughts
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :) It was very crude and in-your-face. Surprised it's so popular.
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Sadie626 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is bad ass!!!!
Though, I must admit, the rhyme scheme starts to unravel a little bit at line:9, but, still, marvelous!
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :) It almost surprises me this poem is so popular. And yeah, it did.
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Slick666Rick Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012
It's wonderful. I realy like it.
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :) Oddly, it's my most popluar deviation so far it seems.
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Uke-Neko-Pet Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I love it! Doesn't exactly fit my side of things but it somewhat expresses how i feel too. Good job.
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :) I was afraid some on this site would see it as weird or odd, for good reason I guess. but with six or so faves to it, guess not lol.
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juessy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011
love it
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Akhenaten-Aten Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2011
Ahh and you look so very innocent, too!
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BloodFoxx14 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Lmmfao thankyou XD -Light blush- Yeah, Ive got my out of it side I suoppose.
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