Tie me up, gag my mouth, Whip me till Im sore, Ill be your slave, Ill be your pet, Ill be your fucking whore, Slash my legs with razorblades, Fuck me rough and hard, Do what you must, have your way, And leave me bruised and scarred, Put me on my leash and tease my hormones, Punish me if I moan, Choke me out on my collar, For everytime I groan, Finally you free me, and I have my way, Tormenting you the best I can, The night ends, and we go to bed, With whip marks all along your back
I rather enjoyed your poem but I am a real person in bdsm and I think you have much to learn hormone should never be used in a bdsm reference unless referred to a trans and the marks you speak of are well worded. So if I had to grade your work it is a C+ in my book. Keep writing and I will keep reading I look forward to see what you come up with next.
This sucks dick with too much teeth. Light level BDSM participant indeed. Nobody can switch from subspace to domspace that quickly, at all. And you lose pace in the 'hormones' line and then again in 'have my way.'
Please, stop writing poetry and get the fucking fuck out of BDSM.
I'm not sure any of these commenters are into BDSM either - as a true dom and sadist and a published novelist, I have no fear in telling you that this is seriously a literary abortion.
Any other real dom would tell you the same. Not coddle you like the rest of these fools.
Gah, my apoligies. That dashing little Submit Comment button is rather cramped on DA mobile. But as I was getting at, I never truly bothered over all this time now to really indulge or explore into BDSM too deeply. I personally find what I would say is some strange pull from what I've found of it. As opposed to landing balls deep in it all and sticking with it.
I thank you for reading, it will likely cruise over your head, perhaps logic is a weapon. Insults are assured. Or so I've learned.
If you gave whole hearted critisism, in a polite fashion, perhaps we could've carried a better conversation, you could've shed insight at least for future reference.
But you used harsh lambasting through an insultive nature. That is your loss, from my own observations of our world, if that's a way to sum it up.
Carry on with your ways sir. I do not doubt your writing is bad. Perhaps just over self-glorified.
Buddy, your attempts at being coy are falling woefully short.
As a member of MENSA, I assure you, very little goes over my head, particularly in the logic field of things. Social skills? Please. This is not a social circle, this is you having put out mediocre work expecting praise and as a published author, I am offended.
At any rate, it was my submissive that pointed out the troll fodder you've posted here. I merely took the bait.
You must be a revered/welcome figure in social circles, or maybe in applicable fields? I see at least this generations effects have helped hone those people skills us gentlemen demand of ourselves. I feel it would be unfair, maybe even a tad bit biased, to assume you only carry this firm and level headed, maybe even hardened mentailty that oozes through the structure of your exclamation simply from your time now as a true dom.
I, then and now, do not carry much place or "position" if you will (A little humor, if being dominate upon such a turn has not altered the need for the entrsnce of a pun)
I hear ya, I indeed am a dom-sub, but that's almost strictly in positions in bed (Whose riding who, etc.) And when I wrote this poem, I was still early on in my growing interest of bondage. I sorta wrote this poem to express some thought on it all, and with me being submissive in the poem, I was able to highlight some of the "tools" and "methods" that struck me first upon finding my place in bondage. If that makes any sense lol. Generally, I prefer, and maybe even have to be dominate with females, particularly during sex. I like to be rough, hear them whine, etc. O.o Ahem. Thankyou for reading the poem, glad you enjoyed it
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